Two weeks ago, we had to compare the opinions of three different authors on the subject of text messages. I think that my biggest mistake lies in the layout and the structure of my essay: I was too descriptive and I almost wrote a summary of the authors' arguments. I think this could be improved by showing more explicitly how each author's respective point of view differs from one another, instead of analyzing their arguments one by one. So I should make paragraphs regrouping common point of views instead of having one paragraph for each author.
Furthermore, I did not express my point of view on texting before the conclusion. I should have made it clear in the introduction, which side of the debate I tend towards the most.
It was good to see that you made improvements to your redraft, which reflects what you write above. I hope that you will continue to take a reflective approach to your writing skills development and that doing so will bear fruit in future assignments.
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